karwan say bichar gai

[R0$hNi]

Meri pehli ghazal jo kuch arsa pehlay hee likhti thi
yahan first time pehli sharing k tor par kar likh rahi hon
umeed hai apni ara'a say zaroor agaah karain gai aur rehnumai farmain gai

jinhain kaarwan say gharaz na thi, wo hi manzil par pohanch gai
hamian manzilon ki thi justujoo, ham hee karwan say bichar gai

jisay panay k khayalon main, mairay raat din guzar gai
hamain wo hee akaila chor gai, yonhee baikar saray safar gai

jin pay tha hamain naaz bohat, jin say they ham purkhulos bohat
jo they hamari hee sochon k mehwar, wahi log ham say bichar gai

wo lamhay jo they gul bahar k, jo gham-e-wisaal say they bhikar gai
gham-e-kusaar ki badolat, wahi pair phir say sanwar gai

na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai

meray dil ka tha wo naghma, meray piyar ki thi wo Roshni
andhaire raat mujay bakhsh kar, najanay kahan wo kho gai


Written by : R0$hNi

[withlove]

bohat khoob.. aap ke khayalat to bohat achay hein.. rythm ki bhi ain mumkin koshish ki gayee.. baqi likhti rahen gi .. to aur bhi samajh aur nikhaar aata jaye ga.. wazn aur arooz ko choriye.. filhaal aap bus likhiye magar eik cheez per tawaju dijiye.. rawani ke saath saath ashaar mein qafiya aur radeef eik hi ho .. mundarja bala ghazal mein radeef to sahi hai. magar qafiya nadarad hai .. magar aap ki pehli koshish ke lehaz se mujhe aap mein eik acha shayer nazar aata hai .. so safar jari rakhiye.. aur share kertay rahiye.. daad qabool kijiye.. Nawazish..

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove

[R0$hNi]

bohat khoob.. aap ke khayalat to bohat achay hein.. rythm ki bhi ain mumkin koshish ki gayee.. baqi likhti rahen gi .. to aur bhi samajh aur nikhaar aata jaye ga.. wazn aur arooz ko choriye.. filhaal aap bus likhiye magar eik cheez per tawaju dijiye.. rawani ke saath saath ashaar mein qafiya aur radeef eik hi ho .. mundarja bala ghazal mein radeef to sahi hai. magar qafiya nadarad hai .. magar aap ki pehli koshish ke lehaz se mujhe aap mein eik acha shayer nazar aata hai .. so safar jari rakhiye.. aur share kertay rahiye.. daad qabool kijiye.. Nawazish..

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove

bohat shukria janab
thek hai InshaAllah aeinda khayal rakhon gi in baton ka
aur isse tarah tarefain kartay raheiey

[ur_friend]

na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


bht khoob dear
aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai

[withlove]

bohat shukria janab
thek hai InshaAllah aeinda khayal rakhon gi in baton ka
aur isse tarah tarefain kartay raheiey

ji zaroor.. aap aisa hi likhi rahen.. to zaroor tareefen keren gey..

[withlove]

na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


bht khoob dear
aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai

hum bhi koi shayer nahi .. hum bhi aap ki tarah sirf qaari hi hein..

[R0$hNi]

na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


bht khoob dear
aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai

bohat shukria pasand karnay ka

[R0$hNi]

hum bhi koi shayer nahi .. hum bhi aap ki tarah sirf qaari hi hein..

aap qari saheb hain bohat strick hotay hain wo tu

[withlove]

aap qari saheb hain bohat strick hotay hain wo tu

hahaha.. khoob hai ji ..

[naz]

jin pay tha hamain naaz bohat, jin say they ham purkhulos bohat
jo they hamari hee sochon k mehwar, wahi log ham say bichar gai