Tere Husn Se Hun Parishaan Bohat

[Rrahi]

nice onw Sahil...

[Saffroni]

Tere Husn se hun parishaa boht
Tareef krun to munkir tehrun, na krun to beqaraar rahun

aray wah killer jee ..yeh lines to udham hain ...mutbal inse me k zehan main dekho to kia yaad agaya ...

Iqraar bhi mushkil hai ,
chup reh bhi nahi saktay
Majboor hain Uffff Allah..
Kuch Keh bhi nahi saktay




yeh situation personally mujhey bahout achi lagti hai .. uff..khoobsoorat likha hai killer jee.. wesey to main itna likhti nahi bas perhti hi hoon .. but fir bhi me ko laga



Sare zamane se tor lun naata,
tere gird zindagi basa rakhun

ko aisey likhtey ager to ;-s..mutbal k ager to farz nahi


Sare zamane se tor lun naata,
tere gird zindagi main basa rahoon

woh noon ghunnay wali sound to match kering ;-s but aapney rahoon aur keroon ko use kiya na ;-s..me ko rekhoon hazam nahi horaha hai ..wesey hazma theek hojaiega itna zuroori nahi bas phir bhi adat hai kia keroon
bura to khair aapko lagega nahi ..acha lagay to bataiyeyga
khush rahiay aur likhtey rahiay
yeh mainey awaeen kehdiya ..aapney waqai acha likha hai ..meri qaabliyat per shak mut kijiayga

[shaista rao]

nice

[Killer]

Tere Husn se hun parishaa boht
Tareef krun to munkir tehrun, na krun to beqaraar rahun
aray wah killer jee ..yeh lines to udham hain ...mutbal inse me k zehan main dekho to kia yaad agaya ...
Iqraar bhi mushkil hai ,
chup reh bhi nahi saktay
Majboor hain Uffff Allah..
Kuch Keh bhi nahi saktay

Thank you. . relate to sai kia hay wese
thank u again

yeh situation personally mujhey bahout achi lagti hai .. uff..khoobsoorat likha hai killer jee.. wesey to main itna likhti nahi bas perhti hi hoon .. but fir bhi me ko laga


Sare zamane se tor lun naata,
tere gird zindagi basa rakhun

ko aisey likhtey ager to ;-s..mutbal k ager to farz nahi


Sare zamane se tor lun naata,
tere gird zindagi main basa rahoon

woh noon ghunnay wali sound to match kering ;-s but aapney rahoon aur keroon ko use kiya na ;-s..me ko rekhoon hazam nahi horaha hai ..wesey hazma theek hojaiega itna zuroori nahi bas phir bhi adat hai kia keroon
bura to khair aapko lagega nahi ..acha lagay to bataiyeyga
khush rahiay aur likhtey rahiay
yeh mainey awaeen kehdiya ..aapney waqai acha likha hai ..meri qaabliyat per shak mut kijiayga

nahi tum ne bilkul theek point out kia. mujhe ai aur "shair" ne ye bataya tah..
isme mistake hai, baher,haal , note karlia hay ainda khyal rakhunga..
ji koi positive way mai appreciate kare aur ghalti bhi batae to acha hi lagta hay , mistakes well wisher hi batate hain. thank you for that

u ki qabliyat per shak kesa ? qabliyat hoto shak karun na .....
thank you once again [/QUOTE]

[Sky Angel]

zbr10 hai

[SenoriTa]

Accha likha haiiii
ye shair kuch ziada hi accha hai:clap:

keep it up

log kehte hain mohabbat mai mehez dard rakha hay
Aa... keh Tujhe pa ke sabko sharmsaar karun

[Killer]

zbr10 hai

thank you

Accha likha haiiii
ye shair kuch ziada hi accha hai:clap:

keep it up

log kehte hain mohabbat mai mehez dard rakha hay
Aa... keh Tujhe pa ke sabko sharmsaar karun

Thank you santi